Nice!
The stars were soo cute. I liked how you used stars for your characters. No one would ever think a star could be a big meanie or even cry. Nice how that star whipped that tail too lol :D! Very good for your second flash!
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I tried to keep the art simple this time so I could do more with the characters and not make them look all crappy, lol. The mild violence is on there only because I wasn't sure what they would consider violent...
The basic story is that this one star guy is strolling along and he happens upon a much bigger star guy who lost his teddy bear (yes, I said teddy bear) so he goes to get it back but another star guy has stolen it and doesn't want to give it back... oh what will happen?? lol
It's short, cute and cheesy but I hope you enjoy. I'm just trying to get the hang of Flash since I have some free time.
**please only constructive criticism :)
Jaybell responds:
Thanks I'm glad you liked it. I chose stars because they were easy to animate
Nice :3
Nice story and good work with it especially considering you're getting used to flash. And along with what thisgun said, the violent part isn't too violent at all. Keep up the good work.
Jaybell responds:
I didn't think it was violent... but I wasn't sure if newgrounds would think it was violent lol. I've seen some crazy stuff on here but you never know. I'm glad you liked my flash, Thank you for the 10 :)
Great idea but you need to polish it!
I absolutely love your music choice! Big ups to Chopin! But it doesn't seem to fit the environment well. The stars actions fit the music perfectly, but the background colors and clouds just don't fit in. Maybe you could change it to a starry night? Also, the "violent" thing isn't even close to violent. Nice start!
Aww, SO sweet!
I seriously choked up. I also love how you did the stars' facial expressions. Very well done.
Jaybell responds:
Thank you
Very (not) ambicious story.
So you have idea for movie.
Take 3 stars: Sad star on synthol, hero star and "bad guy" star. Mix it in one movie and we get realy boring, short story about... stars.
Btw in scene, after stealing teddybear this silly sign "run with" the star - dude wrong way.
Jaybell responds:
The sign isn't supposed to flip they are going back the way the first star came. I agree that the story is simple, but that was the point.
I'm sorry you thought it was boring.
*ambitious
*really