Amazing :')
This gave me a better view of life, although I don't think you should have looped the song and animation... try a loader at the begging maybe? ;D
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The First way to fail in madness.
boypisces responds:
Nope.avi
ha!
even though it was only one animation and the gun looks shitty as fuck it still made me laugh x]
i like this
you should delete this but have a bunch of shorts like this and you will def do very well in the portal
Review.
Pros:
It's pretty good for your first animation, the shooting effects, zooming, etc were great for it being your first flash submission to NewGrounds.
Cons/Recommendations:
It's very short, and misleads you into watching it over again expecting to have "Rule 2", but it's only a single loop. I recommend you add a replay button as the music also starting overlapping over it's self, and this could probably easily be avoided with a replay button.
It's not drawn very well. Lines are unfinished, some lines are bigger than others, etc. It looks bad and isn't done very well. I recommend you make the lines look a bit better. The gun is also really low quality, I recommend you redo it so that the quality isn't so low.
boypisces responds:
Thanks, and to be honest I agree with everything you've said, I definitely should have put a replay button at the end because only after uploading the video did I see that the video starts over and over and the music overlaps, I assumed like on youtube the video would end when it was supposed to and not loop, and as for it only being one animation this video was supposed to be a preview for a video I've yet to create. I'm planning on doing at least 15 rules, the lines not being finished was an accident and the gun turned out crappy because I can't draw guns so I copy and pasted one of the internet which looked fine to begin with, but when I put it on the flash it came out all pixelated >.<. I am going to remove this one once I'm finished with the main video. Thanks for your constructive criticism mate.