Looks and sounds good, but the humor is way off. The Monty Python bit where the people fall past the window is roughly 35 years old now. The rest is just randomly assembled junk. Pretzels in heaven? OMG its so RANDOM and ZANY it just HAS to be funny, right? Wrong. You can do better than this. Focus your talent towards a well written story next time and you'll deserve your front page spot.