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This was, to be frank, absolutely terrible. The animation was aweful, the backgrounds on characters were enough to drive anyone crazy, and even the BACKGROUNDS were worthy of being called horrible.
The idea seemed appealing, but you have made it boring. Full of try-hard, not funny cliches (sorry for lack of accent), that may have passed about 500 years ago.
Also, your English probably needs improvement... Little to comment on, here. The speach-bubbles, should they even be classified as speach bubbles, were just as bad as the rest of the animation.
I can certainly tell it was a second animation.. Better luck next time. You'll be needing it.