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Super Mario Outtakes

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Hey, guys and gals! MrAmature here with my next best Flash movie. It features a Newgrounds preloader, but I'm not entirely sure how to work with them. Tips will be appreciated.

Anyway, on to the movie. This movie has multiple uses of the same sounds, tweening in training, surprisingly good music quality (with the exception of scene 4).

Hope you enjoy it.

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One key issue

The animation was decent, the main issue I saw was how short it was even with four different clips it was like 30 seconds. a second thing I found was the stories tehmself, personaly I didn't think they were very funyy. But that's my view I'm sure you and others did find them funny.

Pretty Good

This is good for an amateur like yourself. The animation was pretty good whilst the jokes were alright. This is a decent effort so 7/10 for you. Keep it up

Sadly, less than amature...

This movie, needs a lot... And I don't know if I could do better, but here's what it needs...
1) Background, Look at it, Get something actually from mario
2) Funny stuff. What the hell was with the hang glider?
3) WTF was with the birds? That perticular part was extremely boring and not a bit funny.

Just some things you can add.
Spade.

hmmm

it has ok animation good sound but you need to add in floors backrounds etc for actual games keep working with it though your gettin there.

It does show promise.

If this is indeed your first submission, I do see a lot of potential from you. As of right now however, you need to work on a few things. Randomness can be funny, but too much of it will pretty much leave a meh feeling towards it and thus ruining its impact on your flash. Another thing is that you need to put in a lot more work. The lack of a decent background pretty much dampers the experience. A little more effort would benefit you and your works in the long run. I think you can be a good author, you just need to step back and work on your potential submissions before actually uploading it dude.

You have the mind and the comedy for it. Thats important and thats really good. Im sure I will be hearing more from you soon.

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Score
3.64 / 5.00

Uploaded
Jun 14, 2009
4:10 AM EDT