Atleast this was suitable for all ages
I was expecting a deadly kill or a funny humor but it wasn't bad 3/5 for good effort
Author Comments
And so... I'm quite pleased with this one, since it's rather good for my third flash ever.
School assignment, as usual.
Maybe someday I'll have time to work on my own flash work.
I'd need a good idea though.
Critique welcome. :D
shikkaba responds:
I have no sense of humor. :(
It was...
too short. Nice soiunds and animation though.
shikkaba responds:
Yeah, it was an assignment after all. It could've been longer, but I was following a script. Booya.
Thanks for the compliments!
Not bad...
Animation was nice and clean, which is what I like to see. Can't stand crappily drawn animation, unless that is the point of it. The sound effects were alright. You used a decent level of FPS.
The main thing I can think for improvement is that it could have used a little tune of some form. The noir look of the film means it could do with a little bit of a "old-style" 1930s jazzy tune would fit it, if you know what sort of thing I mean.
The other thing was it might have been a little too short. Unless the project only asks for a short clip, then otherwise good job.
The only other thing I can say...
The cake is a lie.
...sorry, that was a really bad pun.
shikkaba responds:
lol. Yes. The cake IS a lie.
It was supposed to be a short one. I would have made it longer. Maybe my next one will be? Possibly.
Yeah, after I watched it, it seemed a little... empty... and the background music would have filled the quiet quite nicely.
Thank you very much!
Workable
Not bad for a third.
Agreed with munch', the story could be clearer but understandable anyway.
I think there's only ever one sound at a time aswell, try working on that. I don't knows how myself but it could be looked into.
Quality is good, add a little more shading or colour?
Like I said, not bad.
You'll get it (y)
shikkaba responds:
Thank you!!! Yeah, I was trying a monochromatic look, but that kinda failed when I added purple for emphasis and failed to shade it. lol. *dies*
Thanks for the feedback!
Pretty good
This proves beyond doubt: The cake is a lie! (Sorry, but that just *had* to be ^^).
I really like this animation. I would've rated a bit higher if the animation had some captions to tell a little bit of a story.
Good job anyways :)
shikkaba responds:
Yeah, that's kinda what I'm hearing from everyone, and that's a really good idea.
When I have more time for things like this, I generally try to do more than what's asked.
Thank you!