Well,
You have decent animation skills, but that is not what I would call a submitable peice of work.
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Hey there Newgrounds,
I made this with a really crappy mouse that liked to dance around while I tried to use it, so it won't be amazing. However, I'm just happy to have "completed" something and to have posted my first Flash animation on Newgrounds. Once I manage to get Flash for my own computer and I can use my good mouse, I'll hopefully be able to work on a few good ideas I have.
But hey, everyone's got to start off somewhere. No need to comment on how it's only about 10 seconds long, and please don't rate too harshly. Please rate on how you think it is for something that was created quickly and simply, and as my first item to be placed on this site.
Thanks!
66th Street
lulz
mclaine im telling you me and ppl sould do some voice acting
make it funny
66thStreet responds:
lol if I have time to get into Flash again Giles.
ok here goes
I liked the graphics and if you can make it a bit longer and some sound you will have something here
66thStreet responds:
Thanks for acknowledging the graphics. I will add sound to my next Flash submission, though I am having a bit of a recording problem (I have already attempted a few "show-like" Flashes, however I can't get a decent place or decent equipment to record well). Next one will also be longer. Thank you for your feedback.
ehhh
It was alright animation, but theres no point in watching this. You should have some sort of overall point to a flash, wether its to get a high score, tell a joke, or envision your fantasy world, it should have a overall flow. Good animation, but a not so good flash.
like the gargoyle sees a full moon, than reacs havoc onto the church/city, OH NO morning and hes back to a statue - example
66thStreet responds:
Thank you for the thoughtful feedback; I will be adding a real storyline to my next submission. However, I do understand that this submission is just simply an animation with no plot.
I'll remember your advice on flow for Flash #2.
very short
very good animation, but extremely short, i suggest taking some time and creating something longer than 2 second
66thStreet responds:
I spent several hours on it total, so yeah it isn't all that long. However, I am planning on making something that's actually worth watching that I will spend a great deal of time on as my next project. Thank you for the feedback.