Quite nice for a first flash
Smooth movement, nice graphicks.
The nuke at the end was bad, i think.
Use more smoke, more red and yellow, and maybe some clouds to let them see that it is really a big bomb?
Author Comments
First flash movie, please give me some constructive criticism so i can improve
Thanks
Cl48 responds:
ok will do thanks its all upto practice really thanks for the hint tho
Okay...
I think that's all there really is too say... it was okay... good first movie though
2/5 4/10
Another animation like this? *sigh* Well, since it's your first...
This is your first flash ever, and considering that, it's pretty good.
Animation isn't very fluid at times, and the art was sketchy too and lacking detail, BUT, it was more than adequate and easily recognizable for what the scene was trying to depict.
The theme was overused and generic, but I don't think originality is what you were going for here, but I'm still holding it against you.
Audio sync was good, BUT, the audio was a little loud and a little scratchy at times.
Overall, I see SO much potential in you (not in terms of originality) for animation to come. You don't see first flash like this too often, and I've seen worse from people who have made flash before. Plus you aren't a jackass and put effort into this and didn't make something completely random because you like seeing people call you a jerk , trust the reviewers here, that happens way too much. Good Job!
Cl48 responds:
Thanks for the pointers i am going to try and improve on my animation, ive just not got a great deal of time at the moment, anyway thanks again :)
it is a copy of open here
i do not like people who take ideas
Hmmm, okay...
Alright, I may as well get the negative stuff out of the way first. The animation is rather primitive, as are the details on the figures. However, this is to be expected from a first-time animator. I was not expecting a masterpiece.
Okay, what this flash lacked in quality, it made up for in potential. The animation, though simple, was very fluid. I also found interest in the action against the dummy. I thought it was pretty funny when the dummy blew up, just so you know. :)
I don't know much about flash, so the best I can offer you is words of encouragement. Keep on trying, and you'll eventually get better. You're on your way, kid; at least you put effort into it. I'll give you a 5/10 for trying to do SOMETHING worthwhile.
Cl48 responds:
Thanks for the words of encouragement i'll keep these in mind when doing the next one :)