Could be much better

Animation/Graphics: 2/10
Sorry, but before the thing even started, I knew it would be fairly bad. The tween on the loader was fairly messed up, giving it straight away an unprofessional feel.

The drawing of the stickmen were fairly bad. Their heads were too big, and your arms should come out of your shoulders, not your ribs.

There wasn't enough animation for me. The most animation was the small battle, but that went by far too fast to take it all in.

For the most part, the colours were good, except when there was the close-up of the stickfigure, the text was very hard to read.

Storyline/Concept: 4/10
It was a good concept, but not very well laid out, with the massive block of text at the start, and then the snippets of text in the rest of it. If you had taken the time to hire voice actors, which isn't very hard, really, it would have far better.

Audio: 3/10
The song was alright, but it wasn't connected with the flash in any way. It was just a normal song. Also, sound effects would have been nice.

Overall: 3/10
You have the backbones of an animation, but need a lot of work.

[Review Request Club]

Needs work.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

The Good Points - The backgrounds that you had were pretty good and you used good colors in the flash for the most part. Sometimes the drawings of your sticks were decent.

The Bad Points - You barely had any animation so in the future I recommend you add more actual animation to the flash. Most of the drawings were done very poorly and really need a lot of work. The animation that you did have wasn't too good. When the red text was on the brown background I had to strain my eyes to read it.

~ Story/Content ~

The Good Points - You had pretty good story behind the flash. Sadly I haven't seen the first one so I don't really know too much about the storyline itself, but from what I can see is that you have done a pretty good job with the story.

The Bad Points - I really didn't enjoy clicking after every time they said something. I much rather have a space button to push instead of clicking a button every time. Even more than that I rather see you make the characters talk by animating their mouths and by using a voice actor.

~ Audio ~

The Good Points - The music that you used wasn't too bad.

The Bad Points - I really didn't think that music that you did choose was a good choice for the flash even if it was an alright song. I think you should visit the audio portal of newgrounds. Link below. (Take out any spaces that may be created)

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/

I also think that you should have included sound effects and voices to make the flash much more interesting.

~ Overall ~

You should really take your time and listen to some of the review you have. If you do you could turn this into a pretty decent series. Good luck and keep up the hard work.

~ Review Request Club ~

Lacking A Lot

First off your stick figure artwork isn't all that great, you could've done better. As for animation... it isn't much animation if I have to click through multiple scenes, plus with little action in this flash it really isn't much to look at. Also the ending is weird as well and didn't come together completely. Your story was a bit cliched, predictable, and boring. As for sound effects great job, but I think you could've gotten more creative in background music choice. It was just that one background song choice for the whole flash from beginning to what I guess was the end. I suggest you stop by the Audio Portal and see what you can find.

|| Good Points ||
*Good Sound

|| Bad Points ||
*Bad Artwork
*Bad Animation
*Bad Story

| Review Request Club |

4/10

This video had a weird story line. But it was nicly put togather. It lacks some stuff i think would make it really nice. Liek have it auto play rather then click next button. If you are worried about peopel keeping up with the text just adjust it to a simple speed. Othr then that it pass xD

Just when I was getting into it...

You kill off the black guy. I think. I dunno... was there more after the cellphone scene? Meh... I say keep practicing, bud. More animation, por favor.