The spelling and grammer in pretty bad. The voice is terribly annoying. The storyline has potential though. At this point though, I really wasn't very entertained.
And how could your flash be that old? It has Metroid Prime 3 music in it! That was a year and a half ago, and this flash had to have been made after that. Therefore, this flash is less than a year and a half old. Since it takes a while for the music to become available, the flash is most likely less than a year old, or close to a year. So where do you get off saying that the flash is so old? Sounds like you're making excuses to me.
So use spell check, correct grammer, and try writing with sentences that actually make sense when spoken. And get a real voice! I'd also suggest less text and more animation. This is a flash, not a book.