Hmm..
Your animations were decent, the drawings good, but the story needs work. Keep it going, just improve on what you have now.
Author Comments
This story is about a diver who practices a lot... sadly he does not please his diving coach. The diver does not like this constant nagging... so he deals with the coach in his own way.
all comments and ratings appreciated!
Thanks
pawlakt responds:
yeah... I kinda rushed though this movie and i hate myself for it! I totally agree that the storyline needs work! at the time i wondered if people would 'get it.' turns out it needed a little more work!
Ehhh..
The Confusion started with the shape of the divers head, and just went from there.
The animation was decent for a random. Though the plot to this seems.. non existent.
pawlakt responds:
there is a plot... though it wasn't expressed well... as for the diver's head, I really have no idea where that came from! It was just the first thing that came to mind i guess!
I think his speedo is on too tight
LOL why is he so mad?
pawlakt responds:
nice! love the speedo comment! I explained the reason for his anger in the author's notes, though in the story, it wasn't as apparent!
idk if your one for constructive criticism, but...
i think the video would benifit greatly from having more content to help flesh out your story. your comments provide the info, you just gotta show a little more and maybe get some more laughs. not bad though
pawlakt responds:
thanks a lot! i am totally up for constructive criticism and I love your comments! You are entirely right... i rushed through it and the flash shows it... next time i'll work on fleshing out my story.