It has a great message behind and... hey i LOVE turtles! :-)
not too good with the graphics, and he only came across one animal. i was sorta expecting him to meet up with a bunch of flying animals, who all tell him how good it is to fly. and a tortoise floating in the air dosen't make much sense. however, I liked the moral in this and it would be good for a children show (as Korriken said)
this is different from most things you see on newgrounds, and maybe, you can write a story about it, rather than a movie. keep up the good work!
Yeah, if I'd had time I would of built up the story a bit more. Thanks for such a constructive review.
yay! The tortoise is happy.
Great message, and a great flash, keep it up!
It had a great message behind it unlike a lot of newgrounds videos.
But there was 2 things wrong with it
1 It was super slow
2 It didnt make much sense in both literally and in a story telling sense
I will explain in depth about these problems
1 Cut out or speed up the walking scenes they were tiring and unsuitable for the mass majority of newgrounds who want either fast paced, funny jokes, or vagina in their videos.
2 literally- Why was he flying?
Story telling- There was a long slow intro then a couple lines from a wasp followed by a longer walk then he starts talking to the sun, the second longer walk was unnecessary. Also in most childrens books (looks like you were aiming for that) after the wasp the turtle would have talked to say a humming bird or something.
3 I didn't care for the hastily drawn graphics, mostly just the backgrounds that were incomplete and had white spots. If you were intending to leave it that way on purpose -ok, but it didn't work well
Please write a response I am always interested in what authors have to say and and sometimes they prove me wrong
Well, the point of the whole thing is that it's done at the tortoise's pace, slow and... yes boring.
As for devolping the story, yeah, I would have built up the emphisis of the lack of flight and speed if I'd had time - good point. I thought that the 'flying' explained itself, 'cause he was in like.... heaven! Or somthing along those lines.
The backgrounds were simplistic to put focus on the characters - although, yeah - they were a bit patchy. I was just getting used to ArtRage.
Thanks for the costructive review.