Hey all,

This is my second Flash video and my biggest ever made :/
I'm kinda getting depressed cause I only made 900 kb in 6-7 houres ...
I glady accepted the tips people gave me

!Edit!
-Got a preloader
-Made the plot text more "readable"
-fixed a button
-deleted the red star ... only with the button now
-now the story makes sense without the star lol ...

!Things I had to focus on!
-a story , well a small story
-Sound , def :D
-Better Graphics , I tried
-longer , well longer then my other one :/
-Added a weird wonnabe 3d effect or something :)
erm I had alot of fun and learned like ...alot
also my text is abit messy ...
but I'll change it soon :)

-extra , I added some actionscript , I don't think I did bad ...

I hope you guys like , please if you have any comment about my style or if I'm doing something wrong , please let me know I'm eager to learn ;)

Jesse