good story but..

good story but you need to work on it more for Colour, text, sounds. this is more like a webcomic witch it's great for it
7/10 + 4/5

good

it was very nicely executed. the text at the middle and end went a little to fast. but it was a good length and yet not lacking substance.

hmmm.

For a childrens story, written by a child, that could pass for a c grade. I feel that, beeing a childs story as it is, it's not quite newgrounds material.

Man that one was funny

But shouldn't it be "The goat, the duck, the bee, the porcupine, and the turtle"? But it was funny the whole thing.

not bad

A cute video, and kind of funny in a wierd way, could use sound though, maybe music. The animation was a bit shoddy, but it kinda worked with the story for some reason. A lot of people might vote low on this, but it seems original to me and I'm sick of unoriginal shit so I'll give you a 7 of ten.