ive had better...

it was ok there was no concept to it but thats kooll... it was original... i did however liked the way you made the charchters eyes looked all crazy looking... keep on trying...

wtf

hard to hear no funny jokes avery short and and gay death

Ehh...

I don't want to blam it, but I don't want to protect it either... so I'm just not going to vote and give you the review. You're lucky, most people have just been getting the vote and no review today!

Storyline:
It was very lacking. Even for a short flash. All kinds of holes. Only thing I could really think to do would be to at least introduce the characters and what's going on. Some kind of title sequence, maybe?

Animation:
Could use some work. Could have a lot more movement to try and make it more cartoony rather than moving doodles, you know? Also, I think it could be a lot smoother. For instance, after the guy behind the counter shot the other and he was lowering the pistol? I highly doubt anyone puts a weapon away that slowly.

Artwork:
Very basic. Not that this is much of a problem, but I think if you could better yourself in drawing a coloring and such, you could make some great flashes! Also, I noticed you tried to use shadows outside the restaurant, but they were gone once we were inside. Continuous usage of effects like that will score points with most people paying attention to detail.

Despite the above notes, I give it a 5 for effort and potential. Keep working at it!
Practice makes perfect!

Thanks for submitting and good luck to you.
~R~

not good, but

i'd say good enough to let others take a look-see

Lol

That's one way to get rid of annoying customers!