This is my first Flash project from way back when in 2005 (and my first submission to Newgrounds). I know it's not quality material, and I'm not going to panhandle for fives hoping to get your sympathy. All I ask is you watch it, and then tell me what you think of it.
Bigger and better things are on the way. I guarantee it.
EDIT: So I came in the next day and found I had scored an amazing 1.79. That's fine; I didn't expect a great score. And since pretty much every reveiwer who bothered told me the same thing, I now know what standards I have to meet for my work to be considered halfway decent. Thank you to all reveiwers!
Not bad
The storyboarding in this animation is great, and you don't necessarily need more frames. What I'm assuming is that you hand drew every frame for the people, either that or you used poor sprites. Try tracing the bitmap so its easier to delete the white around the edges. Also, it'd looks really cool if the backgrounds were hand drawn as well. Just add some sound and you've really got something.
Thank you for the response, sir, and sorry I got to it so late. As I said in the description, this was made a while ago; I was just getting into Flash, and didn't know about "Trace Bitmap." (You are correct that I hand-drew the people.) I've improved since then, but haven't been able to finish anything--or really, even start--due to lack of incentive and life getting in the way. But I am working on a storyboard for a new project, and I will definitely be adding sound this time.
Thanks for the pointer about the background. I'll bear that in mind.
A neat style
But like EVERYONE else is saying, add sound, also, more frames would be preferable.
Yea ummm...
I couldn't bare to watch the first 45 seconds of this piece of crap. Maybe putting some sound or music in it would cover up the sound of my soul dying.
Well, obviously it wasn't total crap. You still gave it a 3. :-D
Sound, sound
Pretty much, all it needs is sound, and then it would be really funny.
Just harder to laugh at if there is no noise.
needs sound!!!!
'nuff said.
it isn't too bad, it just needs sound!