EDIT: Thank to everyone who reviewed! There is now a new cut, (ng might break this link but here it is anyway)
http://www.newgrounds.com /portal/view/452031
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TITLE: Olympus Burger Offical Trailer (Newgrounds Focus Group)
RUNTIME: 1:09
Hi!
Thanks for clicking to the official Olympus Burger trailer.
We've cut this as promo material to help us pitch the show to networks,
and to hopefully get more hits on video sites like YouTube (because that's what TV Networks are looking for now)
I've posted it here on Newgrounds before it's official release to get feedback from the community I trust.
Contains some footage from the Pilot, some new animations I dug out of the vault, and backstory regarding the series origin of the Gods at Olympus Burger
Please post a review of what you think.
Does it look like a "real show"?
Any editing/content suggestions?
Thanks for checking it out! Sorry for the filesize, it was edited in Final Cut.
Fresh idea
I like the cut of this jib. May I make a few suggestions?
-The text at the beginning comes too fast for your average person to absorb.
-The audio is a bit crackly (at least the file you submitted here is).
Overall it's a very effective trailer. I think you'll get a lot of hits on this one because it doesn't appear to be your everyday web comedy.
I find myself intrigued, so your trailer worked well. I'm going to go watch your pilot now.
Awesome, thanks for the feedback. The text has been slowed down in cut 2 (now up on Newgrounds, check my userpage), and the audio gets a little raped with the video to flash conversion. I'll drill the quality down harder on the final cut.
very goods
i watched the first episode you had on here before and i liked it and
im looking forward to getting to watch the series and laughin my ass off and
telling my friends about this show.
awesome, glad you liked it! We'll do our best to make even better stuff from here on!
Nice Trailer!!
I already watch the first episode since it was released here in NG,
have you guys started on the next??
Can't wait to see that... You guys really did a good job on this...
and so I'll give a 10/10...
We've got six scripts ready to go and we're writing more, right now we're just trying to make ends meet while we prepare our pitch. We'll be releasing some new shorts soon, and hopefully more OLYMPUS BURGER shorts shortly after that (short). Thanks for the review!
Pretty Good
It definitely entertains.
Either the music volume needs to be lowered or the mic volumed needs to be raised, because the gods were hard to hear sometimes.
Hades seems like the most interesting from the series, and again in this trailer. I think so long as he gets plenty of screen time, everything will be okay.
Aphrodite could use a little more character development, maybe a quirk or two. In the trailer, just like in the series you've posted here so far, she seems kinda like just another token chick.
Speaking of token chicks, that's another thing: you could use more, in particular at least one more as a primary character. Hera could be the domineering and world-weary middle-aged cashier; Diana could be the outspoken naturalist who's only hanging around so she can pay for the next Greenpeace trip; Athena could be the cool chick who always puts things in perspective and actually has more to do with keeping the restaurant running smoothly than the manager. Anything for variety.
Anyhow, hope it takes off for you.
Thanks for the ideas! I agree with you about Aphrodite, we've developed her a bit since the pilot but have no new footage of her. I like the idea of a quirk...gotta think of a good one.
We have scripts written that include Artemis, Apollo's hippie sister who works at the food co-op, and Persephone with has a stint with Hades, and Hera, Zeus's domineering micro-managing wife.
Thanks for the review, very helpful. I'll be sure to fix the audio before the official release.
Good
I would like to see Kratos in it, that would be funny seeing the god of war working at a fast food joint
Cool, a few people have requested to see Kratos, so we'll see if we can write him in to future episodes. Thanks for reviewing!