Cheesy, but it should live
Yes it was cheesy, but it did tell a story and have different scenes. Pretty decent animation. Need to get a mic so you can do the voice-overs instead of writing out what they are saying and thinking.
P.S. Though it was kind of ironic that I was watching this innocent, syrupy, romantic movie attempt and directly beneath it on NG was a banner ad for "Freak Cock" with some chick getting doggied. The juxtaposition made me laugh.