It needed to be more eventful.
At first it seemed really nice and I was expecting it to be a beautiful movie, but it just didn't progress on from where it started, it just showed a girl being sad, you should have shown her memories of the times she had with the girl she was in love with that she had lost(that's the story I got from this, if it's wrong, sorry but that's what I got), as it would have made the movie more touching and more beautiful. Don't get me wrong, what you had was good, it's just that you didn't progress with it. I liked how the girl had two weird eyes, had they been normal the movie wouldn't have been as good. The only part I didn't like was the part where you showed the fly flying from right behind it and just followed it around the room, I didn't like it as you couldn't really make out what it was, it just looked like an odd object and it just went invisible as it turned as it was just an image that you were skewing, I also didn't like this part as that part just didn't seem to have any point to it. The sound quality could have been better, as there were a few moments where the sound was pretty grainy.
Peace Out, Afro Stud