well
i can tell youve worked on it, so i gave it a 5 to try and help it through judgment :)
crits:
the voices were way to quiet, i couldnt really hear anything that was said :(
ciggerettes dont go that way round in an ash try lol, the light end goes into the glass bit :D
gfx could do with being touched up a tad, things like the sticks limbs being all wobbly, it doesnt take long to go back and smooth these things over, but it makes them look a lot neater :)
fingers crossed for you though, hope it gets through :D