Really now man....
To be honest, this isn't that bad as far as first time submissions go, but when you're offering harsh critique on WHOOKOS who are submitting stuff lightyears above your level, I would expect better.
You can't offer critique on their artwork at all , PERIOD.
And before you say, "Oh but my new flashes are better *Whine excuses*"
Prove it before you offer your artistic opinion on somebody else down your nose, honestly.