WTF??
I'll give it one star for effort. But I have a few questions/suggestions.
A; What is this so-called dream even about? It looks poorly designed and sequenced. Is it even about anything? You could try to establish a plot and maybe clean up the artwork a little, unless that's what it's supposed to look like. Like you said "blunt abuse".
B: Sound. What in the blue hell are these characters even saying? Either your mouth was completely covering the mike, or you need better articulation. Equipment quality is also a factor. Sound tests obviously can root out these problems. If I had been able to understand the dialogue, I might've had some gist as to what this toon was about.
C: Please don't advertise a flash as a game when it is not. Honesty in advertising is likely the best policy in this case. That said, don't be discouraged, all things have room to grow. You can only make something the best it can be.