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Turban Man 1

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This is my first submission to newgrounds and this is my first cartoon actually. It would be very helpful if you guys could leave me some comments on how to improve! Thank you very mech!!!!!!!!!!

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Keep trying.

It was ok, but like others said the voices were too low, and when you click play again the end music is still playing through it. Not to mention the credits are too fast. Nice try for your first flash.


I thought it was a nice start, the best parts of it was the right music and such. THough, I think that the music level was too loud and the vocals weren't loud enough. Having that fixed would have helped a bit.

Turban man?

Turban Man has potential for alot. I hope after a series of improvements, you bring him back to see his true potential. Good try for a first movie.

Pros - Original Characters, well placed music
Cons - Simplistic art, abrupt music interruptions, short.


really not bad for the first cartoon. I would make that beginning part not as long and smoother. Here's some advice for that (drawing words like that) Actually use the line or text tools to make the words then erase chunks of it in the opposite order so when it plays it looks like you're drawing it. It may help to use know you can select some frames, right-click and click reverse-frames to reverse the order of the selected frames.

Not Bad

I liked it good for a first flash, it just really needs a volume boost.
I use audacity for any audeo work I do.

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2.49 / 5.00

Jan 23, 2008
8:50 PM EST