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Seems short, and is somewhat obnoxious.Also,you might want to pace things a bit.
Believe it or not, this actually took me quite a bit of time, around a month or so, but that was with delays and general laziness. I'm still not 100% happy with it, but it's still 4000 times better than the original.
If you want, you can view the original here: http://bohlonuts.devianta rt.com/art/Boiled-Over-37 009166
I hope you get at least a chuckle out of it, and forgoe the obvious comment of how the blue hair guy sounds suspiciously like Carl from Aqua Teens. Once again I'll repeat, I'm not a voice actor.
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Seems short, and is somewhat obnoxious.Also,you might want to pace things a bit.
obnoxious, wow, wasnt expecting that, thanks tho
nice idea
let it be more fluid, make things go faster, cut the pauses between speech, and it should look better
thanks