Hmm...

You sound really young. The least you can do is put your voice in Audacity and deepen it. The animation itself was minimalist but smooth as a baby's ass. Overall, it's okay, and the end was so satisfying.

ummmmmm

it sounds like a nine year old, maybe 10. well i shouldn't judge on age. it was kinda boring but the end made me laugh

"It's Snowing"

We get it. It's snowing.

Wait.

There was snow on the ground, but it wasn't actually snowing at the time...

You LIAR!

Hmm

The graphics are the least of your worries here. I've seen worse drawn submissions get good ratings.

For the sound... At least turn the TV off in the background before recording it...

Also, to make something people will actually watch until the end. Make it move at a reasonable pace, and give it something to make people stay... Like a plot... Or at least the hint of one...