This has some potential, but needs work. There wasn't really any ending at all, almost as if you cut the story off and could be longer.
I like the idea though.
Not bad for a first flash.
I liked the text font but the text kept going too fast and i didn't get a chance to read some of it so you need to work on that but overall it was good for your first flash and i loved the song you added at the ending credits,keep on improving and good luck. :)
It had potential
But keep at it!
It was pretty good for a first try to be honest......
i found it c a cool video