Your classic first.

Now this is one of those "classic" first submissions. One of those submissions that is made just to be made, or submitted. Nonetheless if it's done in paint you didin't do a bad job with it, even if the story itself is lackluster at best. Next time make the submission longer, or at least have some sort of story to it, not somthing that I could have thought up in kinderschool. Nonetheless the graphics were good for paint and all in all, other then the story the submission was bad. You have potential for sure.

Meh... I'll take a shot.

I'm not interested in if its your first flash or not, maybe it gets you a larger score, I don't know. My one outlook on this, its to short. Other then that, I say you roll with this story, put a little more into it, more characters, and really show up some skill! You're clearly learning fast, if this is your first flash, I would really like to see more.

Not a bad start! Not a bad start at all!

Really your first flash? This? nice! I like it!

Not bad

All you need is voice acting. You dont need professionals, just someone with a mic. Like me! Well the animation was pretty good and I liked the sound effects. Needs a better stroy line. Try making a parody of something, that is easy to write.

nice for a first toon

Like the graphics and sounds, but more an experimental thing than a propper flash. More humour would make it better. I've seen a lot worse, though. It's also nice to see a flash that doesn't rely on violence and/or porn.