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It wasn't a bad story. A little slow moving, but overall not bad. It's pretty obvious that English isn't your first language, so it would have been good to have someone proofread this to make it sound like more natural english. Graphically, this could have used a bit more, especially animation wise. It was still through most of the movie, which was kind of boring.

ehh...

A bit childish for my taste, but still kinda touching. Put a little more animation in there and I'm sure you'll have a great result!

uhh

idk what theyre saying.

It Was A good storyline but....

Great idea for a story, and it had a good moral to it. But it took too long to get to the point, and the loop in the music just got annoying.

Great suggestion to improve it would be, animate it a little more instead of them just talking back and forth, and maybe animate the problems the girl was having when she talks about it.