touching
I thought this was very beautiful. But like the others I felt it was hard too read because of the font and the color. Like the summary says, this was touching. Thank you.
Author Comments
This peice is about a young man's death, and how it impacted those around him. The young man is left nameless, and the name will never be mentioned. Also yes the school in the poem was mine, but I did not directly know him.
This is week two of my weekly poety, which will continue for months to come. I have choosen only death so far not to be morbid those jsut happen to be the most meaningfull poems I could think to sumit.
Again the audio is by Hanai. The song by him I have choosen to add I feel adds to it quite nicely.
Also new to the second one is:
Preloader: Thought it would be better with one although it instanly loads.
A backdrop: This is done by me using my smudge art, then I filtered it. I don't normaly filter it, but I wanted you to be able to consentrate on the text more, so by using this filter the image lost some of it's flare. This loss also helps fit it into the feeling of the poem.
SprintT responds:
Thanks a lot, and I have a lot to work on for the flash :)
Chya
Lovely, lovely, lovey. Once again I loved this work of yours. The text was a bit hard to read. I wouldn't suggest using red again. The muic was wonderful. I thought the pages flipped a little too slowly this time, but it was defintely better for the slower readers out there.
SprintT responds:
Ya my flashes need some work ;/
Like the other guy said.
My eyes sore from trying to read the text. @_@
I love that you are always dealing with serious matters; expressing sorrow of lost child and paying sympathy for the abused.
But, the font size and the color of the writing do get in the way of fully appreciating poem. One last thing: Buttons! Make buttons so ppl can flick through it. Just a suggetion. :)
SprintT responds:
Thanks for the review, also great news. My next one wich is 50% done has not only button but a menu too. Also I am reworking everything to make it easier to read. Losing the whole image backing, and doing a nice design for it instead. Dont forget to watch the next one XD It should be out this monday, maybe sooner, but then IDK if I could really call it a weekly thing XD
compared to your last one...
this one is an improvement by a lot. im scoring you a 10 because im trying to support your intro to interenet flash. Good luck bro. Song worked great with it.
SprintT responds:
Thanks a little support is always supported.
Can't read text
I can't read the dark text because it's against a dark background and rather small if it's to be read against that background. Would probably work if it was about twice as big.
SprintT responds:
Are you sure it wasn't just you? No one else seems to have had that problem. But I will work on making the text readable by anyone.
