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^^Good Points^^
Pretty neat movie you made. I think if you finished it, it could be pretty popular and get a much higher score. It's neat how it looks like it's on an old scroll or something, and the hand drawings go well with this. Interesting storyline too, overall nice job.

^^Needs Improving^^
Not a big fan of unfinished works, so finish this. Also, I think you should have put subtitles in, or spoken a bit clearer. Sometimes things are hard to hear.

Needs subtitles

Well, this is a decent flash - I like the way that you used the drawings either drawn by hand on lined paper and then scanned onto the computer where you can cut them out, or cut out before scanning.

I think that if you want to use a map for reference, use something a little less well known than Middle-Earth, by JRR Tolkien. What I'd suggest that you do is find a few fantasy maps on the internet and splice them together.

I'd suggest that you give us a subtitle bar - sometimes it was really difficult to understand what was being said by the narrator, which makes people lose their attention span. A subtitle bar would certainly help. On top of this, try being a little further from the microphone, as it will help people understand what you are trying to say.

Looking forward to you taking this further.

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Not bad...

...in fact, I like it. I think it would be interesting to see the finished product, but I would include subtitles because sometimes it is hard to understand or hear what is being said. If i could give 6.5/10 I would, but I don't think it's good enough for 7 (not being completed and all) , so you'll have to settle for 6.

Nice!!

Great style, very unique. Using handdrawing pictures with motion tweening. And the drawings are really detailed too! The only thing in the images that shouldn't be there is the leftovers of the paper background, as in the clouds for example. Also, you should get a new mic. Otherwise this was great, keep up the good work!

-cd-

Interesting

You have potential, your art is good, but please make the story go faster. I liked your use of blue and all. And the border around the flash was unique and i liked that. The lines through the mountains distracted me however.

I highly recomend you things go by alot faster, i found myself sitting there waiting for something to happen way to much.

Again i think you have potential to be a great flash artist. keep it up.

P.S. that map was rippin goff tolkien bro.