Confusing
I'm confused with this.
Just a load of random stuff with no humour.
Humour added to it would've been great.
But I just don't get it, no storyline, or interesting bits.
I really do think you need to improve.
If the 6 is for a series, then I haven't seen the rest of them, so it wouldn't make sence to me.
But nevertheless, keep working hard.
You'll get something good coming out of your work one day.