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i could see the effort but it was pretty racist. not really against black people but asians. cut down on the racism. everybody in this was deformed except for the white guys.

PS. i am not a hater, i'm white, too.

Let me touch your muffins.

I visited your page after seeing that funny ass bytesize cartoon or whatever it's called and I'm sure tons of other people have as well. I saw the post you made about the idea for this cartoon so I definitely wanted to see it when you were finished. To be perfectly honest... it was as good as I hoped it would be. :P Very nice work and I think your animation style is great, can't wait to see your future work.

that was brilliant

your best work yet

well not to say yourother work is bad
i think u did a great job with this the action scenes were simple and effective and the choice of music was brilliant as also

(title in work)

^^Good Points^^
Gee, I thought this was pretty well done. It was mostly in the storyline of course. The fighting between the Goblin Keeper and the Goblin's was very entertaining throughout, with lots of funny stuff going on there. The ending was rather funny as well. What was with that guy with the weird face?

^^Needs Improving^^
It's pretty long, but I still think that the filesize was a bit too big for this. Definitely could use some audio optimization.

Disjointed

For me, this flash was nowhere near the best I've seen. There are some issues that need to be addressed before the next instalment of any flash you produce.

- The framerate was all screwed up - sometimes it stopped on silly freeze frames and didn't allow it to progress for a few seconds, although the sound still ran perfectly. To a lesser extent, this also screws up your lip-sync.

- The sound effects were too loud. Even the speech was loud, causing static when it is played back. Step away from the microphone and speak quieter, that'll give you higher quality.

- The drawing of your characters needs to be worked on - granted, they do continue to look the same through the whole piece, but when they all look this poor, it means you need to spend more time honing your drawing skills. Practice makes perfect.

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