Good poem but depressing...
Nevertheless it is good to see poetry on newgrounds, but your choice made it have an all too cyncial atmosphere, which i suppose was the intention. I feel I have to explain to those who don't understand; The mans greed in wishing for an eternal soul, cost him his body. Poems message is greed 'decays' a man and makes him alone.
Terrific concept, moody music, spectacular artwork, beautifully dark feel, and well-written poetry. But I didn't like it.
You guys really seem to have a good thing going with the poetry/animation mix, which is why I was so disappointed to find that, while the poem was entertaining, the animation itself was nothing more than a well-drawn guy... walking. I think, since you're so good at animation, you should make a real animation. Keep the poem the way it is, and do a full-fledged animated short to match. This really has potential for a darkly beautiful masterpiece. Don't let it go to waste.
Not too bad. The only problems were that the frame rate sucked, it was really choppy and a little slow. The poem was pretty good, aside from a few mistakes. The atmosphere you set was very nicely done. Also your art is very well drawn, particularly the background objects. Keep it up and work hard. ^_^
Why didn't you get a voice actor to read the poem, while telling the story in animation form. The way you executed your idea ended up just being a showcase for the poety, and not much of a movie in and of itself.
I would've done a 9 but
A. you made the font unbearable to read.
B. you used a final fantasy song
C.a narrator would have helped the font.