Everyone has their "slush pile"
Your first Clock Day submission, unless I'm mistaken. I like the fact that you've gone to the trouble of getting 5 or 6 pieces of unfinished work and stitched them together. It really does show people that you've been working, but procrastination for one reason or another has set in, causing issues of one type or another.
This piece does have some good bits, though the ending did leave a lot to be desired, with the white screen of doom, with that piece of music from Pulp Fiction over the top. An audio credit here would have been really nice, as it's a great piece of music.
With the guitar, get SRM's hand moving up and down the neck, so he can play some notes - little things make all the difference. You could quite easily have expanded upon this piece to make the Kitty Shooting piece your Clock Day entry, by having them die in funny ways for a loop of extreme violence, as SRM takes on the KK and wins, by the looks of it.
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