needs a few improvements

It would be alot better if you made the fire and smoke have less of a boxy bottom. You also need to make the eye focus effect(i don't know name) fit better and also the backround did not fit whole screen... the flow of events needs more work there is to much jumping going on... oh and having an authors comment wouldn't hurt either..

No.

I don't think this should be submitted into the portal, complete crap, in my opinion.

Mediocre

- Pros -
Okay art.
- Cons -
The backgrounds don't take up the entire screen.
= Suggestions =
Take away the instructions for using the Newgrounds preloader.

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............what? that was just nonsensical

art

The art can a little bit better.