Well, that was odd.
Well, I'm gonna give you a 9 just to be generous and cause you used Bionicles and I'm a Bionicle fan so...yeah.
Author Comments
10th subbmission! sorry about the extreme brightness but anyway this is my most action packed episode yet!
I used BIONICLE to do the robots and the music is pirates of the carrabian.
Enjoy! You will find the super hero(Jamie) and Proffessor Manaur sooner in this serise!...
mattuiop responds:
yo thanks!
it was one of my first and i ive improved a hell of alot more since then
so check out my latest! :P
thanks anyway!
Cool
It was good, though i suggest you work on the plot a little more so it doesn't resemble "Klay World:Off the table".
Also, speak a little louder!
mattuiop responds:
IT was an old one!
i made it in back in 2006!
Wow...
5! that was very funny! i hope to see more plastic problems soon!
mattuiop responds:
ye!!!
LOL
Rofl that was funnny as hell u get 5! That was the second best claymation on newgrounds!
mattuiop responds:
realy!
thanks
you should see knoxs suff!
You got a lot to learn when it comes to short film
Your shots are poorly taken, the caracters and personnas are shallow, there's no story, and you filmed in a counter-daytime.
Advise:
Your camera shots should only show what is necessairy, i.e, only the caracters that are talking. There's too much space on top of your figurines and it's not very esthetical.
Caracters and plot, I can only leave it to your discretion weither you want to have a story with good caracters or not. I personnaly dislike the latter.
Counter-daytimes occur when your shots are taken in front of a window and that the sun produces more light than what is in our house. To prevent this, don't take the shot in front of a window!
Take my advise and your short films should be considerably better, even if you did this just for fun.
mattuiop responds:
good instructions
they will get better!