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This is the pilot.Please message me if you think i should start the series.There will be more violence and gore.cooler baddies and weapons.Plus there is a twist in the storie :D

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Good...however...

I hate to sound like an ass, but it must be said.

If this is your first animation, then its not so bad. Here is my review.

Graphics: 3
Why:
Overall, the graphics are just stickmen fighting. There is nothing much that had a lot of detail. Although stickmen can be used as something like "Stick Fight"; you don't give much to hope on. Spend more time on your people inside the flash and try to make some rooms.

Style: 1
Why:
The whole Dragonball thing has been done to death. Complete death. Please use more originality with your next flash. You'll get more points that way.

Sound: 4
Why:
The sound was not too, too bad. Use something else next time. Linkin' Park, as said before is rather old.

Violence: 7
Why:
You have a lot of interesting concepts for future conflict. This is what I liked the most out of your flash.

Interactivity: 0
Why:
Obvious.

Humor: 0
Why:
Obvious.

Overall: 3

PRO:

1) You do have some good hints for future conflict.
2) You used the music rather well; although overused.

CON:

1) Poor animation
2) Couldn't really tell what was going on. It was all over the place.

How to improve:

1) Focus more on the animation.
2) Use better music.
3) Define a good storyline for your possible series. Doing so makes the whole flash creation process a lot easier.

I hope this helps. Good luck!

Cheesec4ke responds:

Thanks for your review.I have an alright storyline planned out.

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You said that if people love this you will add: "more violence and gore.cooler baddies and weapons.Plus there is a twist in the storie :D"

Well the thing is... this flash is not very good... you should have ADDED this in the beginning... i mean... Creating a good story... NOT RUSHING EVERYTHING... and make a decent story with a solid plot... Also practice your drawing... and also last thing... I think Linkin Park songs are overused... Dosent mean i dont like them... but still...

Cheesec4ke responds:

Well no i shoudnt because this isnt the first episode.If i put all that in there i would have things to put in future episodes

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Votes
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Score
3.37 / 5.00

Uploaded
Mar 16, 2007
11:33 PM EDT