Ok well

The graphics almost cut it. The sound however, did not. The humor would of been better if the sound was better, and if you would of used diffrent background music for diffrent scenes it probly would of helped you out.

After watching some of the jokes I could only help but think to my self: "You know if I actully would of been able to hear that it probly would of been funny".

The flash is ok, work on the graphics a bit, get your sound to an audible level, work on the plot line a bit and I think you could do good.

Hmm

I agree with the last review - some of the jokes are extremely drawn-out and because of this they lose all impact (the worst of all was the bit with the guy holding up the signs outside the rock place). Furthermore, the cartoon seemed to sporadically cut between serious and random. Indeed, after watching the first scene I didn't even realise this was supposed to be a comedy until you had the 'should we go to the next scene now?' bit, which seemed completely out of place.

However, as a first submission this is surprisingly decent and because of this I'm not going to try and get this blammed. For example, the artwork - while certainly not award-winning - is pretty good, especially for a first-time submission. The sound is also ok, and you've actually managed to use a lot of music and speech without the filesize going above 2 megs, which is great seeing as so many first-time Flash users have no idea how to compress a movie.

So yeah, keep it up, just try and really focus on refining the jokes and the script. Comic timing is essential to making something funny and if you drag jokes out for too long or simply repeat them over and over again they stop being amusing and detract from the overall impact of the cartoon. You've made a good first try, but it's heavily flawed - work on it!

Meh

The graphics could have been better, and some of those jokes were just too long and drawn out.

They didn't need to last as long as they did.

The sound was not that great.