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On The Green Square

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It was just a normal day for the boy on the green square, until an unexpected visitor dropped by!
I wrote the poem when I was really bored, it was based on a crazy statement I once made: "Go rub your face into two loaves of bread because I hope it looks like you are being eaten alive by Shaq's thighs!"

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oddly funny

it gave me the chuckles. I like the poetry and the animation wasn't that bad.

that was funny!

random, but funny! I liked it.

nice animation of random poem based on an insult! lol

keep up the good work!

Nice poem - but could use a graphics update

I always like starting with the positive so let me acknowledge some of the things I believe you did well with this submission. First off, as you wrote the poem it was original and was actually a rather amusing poem. The way the poem was read was also very cool. It also was a small file size with a quick load time which was nice.

However, with all good comes some suggestions. My suggestions would be to work on the graphics. The characters weren't awful per se, but they could definitely use some improvement. If you increase the graphics and the relationship between the poem and them it would be a lot better.

Basically - nice poem and I enjoyed the submission even if the graphics could use some updats. 7/10

PS: Violence, interactivity, and humor weren't part of the movie imo. They did not effect the score I gave you in any way so don't be flabergasted to see the 1's in those categories. I based my score off of graphics, style, and sound.

Good story

I liked it. It was interesting. I laughed a bit when Shaq popped out.

O_O

Fairly entertaining, but not very good. The voiceover ws excellent, though.

JGold14 responds:

fair enough, thanks for your input

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1,682
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Score
2.00 / 5.00

Uploaded
Jan 11, 2007
7:31 PM EST