That was poor
The start was terrible, the text went too quick, I managed to read it, but only just, and I'm a fast reader. Also the swearing was just unneccesary and just seemed like an attempt to get the kids to like it because you used swearing. There was also no sound, which there really should have been, it just made it even worse without it.
Then you cut to the rabbit and the tortoise as the race was about to begin, again you used uneccesary swearing. Then you used what was an alright joke with the text saying that they set off, well the hare did.
Then you finally used some sound, but it was overused sound clips and it just didn't really fit that well. Then for no reason whatsoever, the tortoise pointlessly shot the hare, it just wasn't funny.
I did quite like the part at the end though where you ahd the text saying "and the moral of this story is..."
Overall it was a poor movie, that just used pointless violence and uneccesary swearing, it did have 2 good points in it though and had you made the joke something different than the hare getting shot it would have been a much better movie. You also should have had sound consistent throughout the movie rather than just at the end, as the start seemed really odd without it and this movie really did need it. I don't remember the advert that this movie is a parody of though(I'm from England), I don't think I've actually seen it.
Peace Out, Afro Stud
1/5