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i didnt get whatever that flash was representing and also try working on better animation you can do better
Author Comments
Me and my two good friends Luke and Vincent are starting this small series. It's about nothing in specific, but please use only constructive critisizm. Things like- lol n00b this sucks, its a piece of crap- will not help me in further episodes, at all. It's my first real motion tweening movie, my last 2 were FBF's. Please enjoy, and give me some tips on how i can improve, please. sorry about the white-line thing on the side. I zoomed in as far as i can go, but in the flash format, there's no gap. if you know how to fiz the problem, please tell me.
thanks.
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Well i will say this..it was better then "HACKware ep1" , and it looks like it took you time to do the art in flash too.., not to shabby for a 1st episode either.
Random
Wow, that was really random, and therefore funny. Good work. Loading screen could be better, though.
Nice Job!!
Nice Job, creative, funny, and I know that your gonna make more of these? Right?!?!?! Don't leave me hangin'! LOL. Like I said nice job. There are only a couple of things you should change. 1. The Loading screen- I could tell what you were going for but I couldn't really see it and 2. the bloopers- You should make more of them. I could think of at least 30 different bloopers.
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This was curtainly interesting. I gave it a 8 not nessisairly for the actualy content, but for the potentail you guys have. You need to clean it up a bit. Like those little sences that had noting to do with the story. I completly understand why you used them. But it robs from the excelent plot. Umm I was surprised. Your loading screen stunk, I was expecting it to be crap. Hahaha a happy surprise I would say. VO is good. Umm music is good. Animation.....is okay. But the story is great. Keep it up, and keep working at it.
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ELP-Swordfish responds:
thanks, I'll get rid of the randomness. and I'm glad you se the potential, they will get better. ill fix the logo, but it was supposed to look kinda scribbly. but nevermind that. ill work on the animation, it was a little stiff.
thanks.