Not half bad.

The last person was right the party when he kills the oldman was off. First he sufficates the old man THEN cuts him up and hides him under the planks. And when he was talking at the begining the emotions was all wrong! the way he sounded was completely off. There should have been drastic changes in the emotion of his voice. He was insane after all.
Looking at the whole was ok. Could have been much better like CC's version, but was ok.

Not bad

Although, i read this 8th grade, you messed up the part when he kills the old man. He doesn't slice him up, he sufficates him with the mattress and then pulls planks from out of the floor and puts the old amn there.

Pretty good.

This was good, it was nice and was true to the original poem. But why did most of the movie have no voice acting?

ok

a good attempt at a hard story to re-create.

some odd choices here

You made some ... odd ... choices in this.

The voice of the narrator, and the depiction of him as well, are a little too dark and ominous. He's insane, not evil incarnate. Every time I think of this story, Gene Wilder comes to mind as the ideal actor to play the narrator (and, as long as we're in an ideal world, Marty Feldman would have made a pretty good Old Man with the Hideous Eye).

I don't recall the dinner scene from the story at all. Why include such a non-memorable scene?

During the opening-the-door scenes, the important bits (that he did this extremely slowly, that each night he went just a little bit further) get submerged in the irrelevant details (the exact date, the time).

I actually did like the Pink Panther music, but having used it you should have stuck with it through to the murder and probably even the disposal of the body... stick the murder during the bridge and as the bridge quiets down and goes back into the main theme show him cutting up the body.

The switch from narrative to dialogue when the police arrived was kind of ... I've been looking for another word, but let me just say "bad." Particularly since you had to invent the dialogue.

The alliterative names were unfortunate, and making up full names for the police officers and the neighbor when the victim of the murder is simply "The Old Man" seems jarring.

The final scene is too fast. I don't feel that slow build-up as the narrator passes from doubt that he's hearing anything to fear that the police will hear it to the point where he's certain they're hearing it and they're just playing with him.