I liked the message
The message of the short was good, keep working on your graphics. Looks like you have some good material, just need to push the picture.
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well, this is the second version of the film. its like the first but it has sound. i chose the slightly annoying song "happy days" because mr. smiths' happy days are over. get it? no? ok.
Funny
Pretty funny...
But work hard as others said... :)
Well...
I see the humour, but this thing still needs work. The Happy Days song - while I understand why you use it - is totally misplaced. Playing it over the cartoon drowns out the cartoon itself. doesn't follow the animation, and it distracts from the reading. Hell, at first I didn't even realize it was coming from the 'toon.
Had you placed it at the end over the credits, it would've probably worked better as a punchline. But using Happy Days theme song is still reaching for straws.
Secondly, floating words are pretty bad choice. I would stick with balloons as they show a little bit more class, and little more effort. Of course, I would suggest that you throw out words completely and do some low quality (to save space) voice recording instead. Sound, almost 90% of the time, will improve a flash.
Work on your animating your people a little more, rather than doing talking heads on wooden bodies.
Umm like a title???
It was a good joke and it was pretty funny but it could have been longer cause with just what there is now, its pretty crappy but i gave it a good score neway.
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