I hate it
When people try to be 'artsy' on newgrounds, the flash just doens't fit in here. It was well animated, I'll give you that, but this isn't the place to show this
Hey everyone. This is my first major flash film I've done, and I'm quite happy with it. Everything is either handdrawn or photoshoped in, so I guess there's not muc helse to say. About a minute and a half long, and set to the Butterfly Effect theme, it's well worth the watch. Rate sil vous plait.
Thanks.
-Dan Annis
I hate it
When people try to be 'artsy' on newgrounds, the flash just doens't fit in here. It was well animated, I'll give you that, but this isn't the place to show this
Once again, someone tries to be deep and fails.
So a guy reads a note that says "I'm sorry." and nothing else, thinks about suicide and kills himself. You never explained why he committed suicide beyond suggesting that he doesn't like apologies. I can't feel sad for a character that I know next to nothing about. The big problem is that we don't know why he's so sad, who wrote the note, or indeed anything about his personality or life beyond the fact that he is wrought with despair for an undetermined reason. You need a much more developed character to stimulate any emotion in most people. The art was good, though.
good job.
ya so i sat with you while you perfected this thing many days when i could have been at home on my exam break. and ya i must say that even after seeing it a whole bunch of times i still love it. the sound timing was a bit off though wasnt it? i noticed the difference in that copy. i dunno maybe it was just me though. but ya keep up the good work i hope your next one is just as good if not better.
<3 me
Pretty good!
Not bad at all- but there are a few things that could be improved upon. Your photoshop works were a bit pixelated on the close up. Not a major issue here... It took WAY to long for him to walk to the cliff edge. You could have cut it a bit... People can assume. And when you zoomed on his eye it looked weird as the eye was very shallowly detailed.
Aside from those, it was a good attempt at a first major production! Keep up the good work.
that's.. pretty good
the hand drawn stuff looked really impressive, though i think the tear could have been done slightly better with a 'fading tail' effect.
no offence if that's a mirror image of yourself but the guys nose looked kinda ugly from that angle. <- ignor that
I think the outline on the bubbles could have done with being a little thinner, really. just looked like giant 'oh's floating upward.
i don't know how you're supposed to avoid this but the hand-drawn cliff over the top of the photshopped image looked kinda cheap..
and i think the only other than that would have made it *really* good, was the short story as to why he's thinking like that in the first place.
Other than that, it was quite impressive. a dedicated piece. Good work.