I am very new to actually making movies. This is going to be my first submission when its complete, not including this submission, which is just a test for the preplanned actual first submission... you understand. Good feedback will help let me know what I am doing wrong and right. Thanks
Well I got a lot of useful reviews, and I have already updated a lot of the movies animation. When I made this submission, I forgot to add that Flip_exp is also my partner in this adventure. He helps write the scripts, does voices, and helps draw some of the stills that are used to animate this.
((( FUNNY )))
Haha ok that was funny, good character design aswell, the animation was ok, the voices from the backround didnt match the text on the subtiles on the bar at the bottom, also it ended short, i did notice that there was no replay button at the end, anyways its a good start good color and the sory was ok but im sure it will be improved in the next one....
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Go spire
Spire, the cartoon is starting to look pretty good. We need to do some little touch up's on it, and spice it up a bit. I assume you fixed most of the little problems promptly after submitting it. I think we need to try to clarify the storyline a little bit more.
Get in touch with me and we can work on it.
Flip
P.S. the roomies thought it was funny...but knew the voice was you.
a test, eh? not bad then...
at the moment it doesnt look all that bad, and i think that this could turn out real well.
things you have done well:
voice acting - pretty clear at the moment, a lot better than in many other movies.
good looking plot - but it was a bit hard to understand what was going on alltogether.
things you need to work on:
mainly the visuals i think...
graphics need more detail, and stay away from using gradients, they are the devil!
work more on animation - always try to make everything as smooth as possible.
also, some more sound effects here and there wouldnt hurt.
6/10
(THE THUMB: UP)
Thank you for the very good feedback. So far I have touched up a lot of the details. The final submission will be done in a couple of days I hope. I have a lot of sound effects that are not in yet. I am adding more pictures and household items to make the place seem more detailed. Again thank you
Mediocre
Ok, if you're going to put a part of a full movie onto NG, at least make it a trailer. The sudden cut makes it look like that monkey threw it all together.
It had no point, but it was decently animated and the sound files were fairly clear, which is why it got points.
Huh?
I was starting to enjoy it--even though I don't know what it was supposed to be about--when it just ended abruptly. Talk about going nowhere . . .