I like claymation.
I can see what you're trying to do in that. I understand it completely. It's just that you should've used more frames. Go to knoxskorner .com and see how many frames knox uses to make claymaitons. His claymation is incredibly smooth. Anyways, I like your storyline. I've never seen a serious claymation before. Keep it up and you'll start to use more frames. - like your work.