Notbad for a first
Well this was notbad for a first but i still think it needs more plot more ideas and needs to be longer aswell, but for sure give it much more plot and story, needs some depth, but again nice work for your first one.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Here are a few things to reflect on, Amusing toon here these are just so short you should really think about adding these into a flash that has a lot of these short clips and with that it would create more of a quality submission, the one short clip just doesnt seem to cut it. The plot was simple and seems like it could use more depth more stuff going on more things to keep the viewer really interested in your movie, Give more info on characters, places, and when, these are something that could have more depth to them. just a few ideas there that could really make this work.