Eh....it isn't -that- bad, but....
could still use a lotta work. The plot was obvious and a bit boring, but if ya got the rest covered, that's....kinda okay....problem is, you didn't. The graphics were obviously. uh...not the best, but that can be fixed with time and effort and such. Your dialogue.....bland, and.....pretty crappy. Along with your grammar at times, heh...well..er....as I was saying.....try and not make it as....cliche-like, in a sense, as it was......the whole "murphy sent me" and "pay a visit to mister Murphy", or whatever the hell he said then, things (And imbetween as well) were definatly......well, they were -so- corny and all......now, for the....er, "blunders" part you put in. Some of them were good....but they just needed a little extra. For example-When the door is stuck: You could've had it come unstuck and smack him in the face. When he fell down:His head could've hit the side of the.....hole...thing.....When he's in the garage:Make the garage door come down on him or something. When breaking throught the gate...thing: You could've had the car run into the other ones and...blow up or something....not the best right there, but.....remember; senseless violence is fun! Yay!