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this only got a six because of the funny quotes lol. cornhole.. ahahhahha
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this is just a preview to the series i am working on...dont complain about the crappy artwork i drew it quickly...episode 1 should be finished soon. blam me if you want...but either way i look forward to seeing the feedback to this sack of shit i call a preview.
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Its good as a preview; if you add some scenes it should be allright...
hmmmm
well, if you don't want complaints about the crappy artwork, don't put it up where people will see it ;)
you need a preloader, and/or compression. i like to watch the little loading bars rather than a blank screen, yanno?
in the credits: on the last repeat of your name, make the joke more obvious by putting some bullet holes (with accompanying sound effects) across it.
rather than just put up the names, put a short description like "the kid gone bad" "the capo with a heart" other stuff like that. so people will want to see the series.
hope this helps.
monster-magnet responds:
ya i got another review like this one...i was in to much of a hurry to do it and it looks like it is going to the orbituaries...thanks for the ideas though i will take them into consideration
LOL, one of the guys is named Ricky..
It could be funny! But this preview is pretty short. I'd put some actual action scenes into it if you want it to stick around in the portal for any lengthy period of time.
Come out with the actual series, though--it looks funny. Hopefully the Fellenberry Mafia will be an inept bunch of pansies who try to act tough instead of just Sopranos knockoffs.
monster-magnet responds:
ya i know its short and i am in the process of adding scenes into it as i am typing this to you...and thats exactly what it is is a bunch of pansies that act tough but arent its gonna be pretty good so you should check it out when its done.