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Fatkid/steak Robot Day Entry

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Fatkid/steak Robot Day Entry 2010-06-06 03:19:41


Fatkidwitajetpak
did the first half and I did the second. He then went over all of it and edited it. We are both submitting this one. HUGE THANKS.

F-Bot's Enjoyable Adventure

One faithful day not so long ago
A man walked here, there, and fro'
Dreaming of blowjobs, sex, and tits
He needed his pleasure, he wanted his fix

He looked for a sign an adult superstore
Hed even purchase a fat Chinese Whore
But to his bad luck, he had no avail
Hed much rather spend the bad day in hell

Just then he saw from across the grey street
He saw something bitter, sour yet sweet
A small cute blue house covered with dust
With a mailbox labeled "Ms. Robust"

He thought to himself, Ms sounds nice!
She must be single, sexy and vice!
The frown on his face turned into a smile
As he went on this path, happy and mild

He stepped upon, the old wooden porch
And knocked on the door, next to a torch
He looked up as the torch caught on fire
A trap door caused him to fall on a pile

A pile of bones, blood, and death
He screamed as darkness consumed his breath
He looked for a sign, a simple way out
But all he could find was a pile of trout

Red eyes glowed from within the cave
A beast of horror began to crave
The trout lying, beneath the man
Luckily he noticed and began to scram

He saw a light and headed near
Before being slapped upon the rear
The hand was smooth a lot like a kettle
And realized the palm was made out of metal

He turned around and expressed a smile
"I haven't had Robot Sex for a while"
She just laughed and rejected the offer
Turned around, and started to hover

She peered at him with her sparkling eyes
And began to say in one loud cry
MY NAME IS F-BOT, THIS IS MY LAIR
MY SENSORS INDICATE THAT YOU SHOULD PREPARE

PREPARE TO RUN, MY DEAREST LASS
CAUSE IM GOING TO SHOVE THIS UP YOUR ASS
She pointed around to the beast behind
It stood high in the air and changed its disguise

It wasnt a beast of nature owned
But a thick blue hunk of metal chrome
It grinded its gears and started to click
As it pulled out several long metal dicks

The man jumped up, and scattered around
There was no where to turn, he started to frown
He grasped against, a rusty lock
As the robot approached him with spinning cocks

He squeezed the lock as hard as he could
Releasing the bolt as it fell to the wood
He pushed open the door and ran up some stairs
Looking for exits, starting to snare

Finally, after minutes of running
He spotted a door, covered in honey
He pushed it open as he heard "LUBE!!!!"
For behind him, the robot stood

It dipped its rods inside of the cream
All the man could do was start to scream
It was a dead end, covered in clover
So the man gave up and began to bend over

That Poor Guy


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Response to Fatkid/steak Robot Day Entry 2010-06-06 17:13:07


It was fun doing this collab and quite challenging. We first started out that he would do the first half and I the second, so we did.

It took him a bit over 1 hour to create the first half of this sucker and I was like a grandma trying to find her glasses.

He had to go over it and edit it, and noticed that the poem techniques were not all the same, so he changed the ending and left 16 lines of mine in.

The theme was meant to be a comedy, so he agreed. He ended up changing it to a dirty poem, so I thought I might go on with it.

Over all Fat Kid did about 44.

It was funny because at the very beginning his part and went up to the red glowing eyes, and no robots were involved, so we had to go right through it and try find a way to involve a Newgrounds Character in it. We eventually found a way to get F-Bot into the story. I will be creating one of my own for robot day, just for fun.

Fat Kid, is a Master of Poems.

We might even be creating a lot more, and this time I will start off and see where I will get with that.


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Response to Fatkid/steak Robot Day Entry 2010-06-06 17:24:19


If only a good chunk of his rhymes weren't flawed, he just might be a master.

Reread over this poem and truly look at what are being called rhymes here, many of them do not work. This is as far as I am willing to go critic wise at this time because I feel this needs addressed.

Anyways, I like how you two worked together. Cool. I hope that this taught you guys a few things or at least proved challenging in all the right ways.


Failure should push you until success can pull you.

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Response to Fatkid/steak Robot Day Entry 2010-06-06 17:39:07


Yeh I know, like Avail and Hell. But sometimes when you are creating poems you would think that it does rhyme, like the way you would say it. He could have tried to make it sound like "Hail." But yes, I know where you are coming at. It does need editing, we have deleted the poem in the official writing post, due to editing.

Hopefully we can improve


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Response to Fatkid/steak Robot Day Entry 2010-06-07 16:46:42


At 6/6/10 05:24 PM, TrevorW wrote: If only a good chunk of his rhymes weren't flawed, he just might be a master.

I agree! And I agree this could make for a fun collab. I'll even volunteer to put it together. So rework this... or maybe start a new one. Keep it to 8 verses, unless you both plan on animating a part, then 10 would be ok. But I'd like to see everyone get coauthored.

I probably won't be checking back on this, so pm me once you get things worked out... but make it quick! Decent animating takes time :P

Good luck!

Response to Fatkid/steak Robot Day Entry 2010-06-07 18:34:08


Wow, very nice story. I love it.